i love what you did around the 2:10 mark and thanks for listening to me too- I absolutly love what you did to change the piece. The added ending is nice too.
What Or4nges says is true though- I unfortunatly have close to no experience with any digitaly created songs, so, take me as the listener class who cant really make a really good review! But in all seriousness, i think that you did great here and my commoner mind is saying 10.
Alright let's see.
First of all, I like the idea for the lead, but I think it needs some reverb, and almost definitely some delay. It contrasts too heavily with the piano, which has alot of reverb. You also might wanna tinker with the chorus a bit? It sounds a little.. eh.. phasey. lol. Also, I think your bassline is a bit off, I heard some dissonance that sounded a bit out of place around the 1:30-2:00 mark.
Next your percussion. I think you should add a bit of sidechaining with the kick to give the track a bit more of a bouncey feel. It's really common these days, but it does add alot. Also helps the kick punch through the mix, which is essential in house and dance music. You might wanna try tinkering with the clap's EQ. It sounds too raw :P
At :34, I would try to introduce a new synth, or at least add something an octave or two higher above it. There's no transfer of energy; no build up.
-On that note, you should add some crash cymbals at the beginning of each segment, and some reverse effects before hand. That prepares the listener for a transition. Kind of a heads-up, and really helps with a songs flow.
This probably sounds kind of negative, but I figure advice is more helpful than "it was good" :P
You've got great melodies, the song structure is there, you've just got to work on adding more effects, more synths, get the percussion to cut through the mix, and possibly beef up the bass a bit. The low ends are really important in dance music nowadays. The bassier the better.
Keep it up, man.
Haha thanks. You're the first person to give me legit ideas on how to make things better on Newgrounds in... well.. Probably ever. I'll look into working on that stuff. I'm not particularly good at the EQ'ing and transitioning part of production yet, but I'll work on it. Thanks. :)
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