Good Remix! I this song will be awesome when I play halo reach as back gound music!
Awesome work on the original different transitions-breaks which are perfect (especially the first one, I was shocked :] ), and really play their role as they "break" your percussive and melodic line with a sort of hesitation and a totally different beat or even sound.
Then about the melody, no problem that's a remix so there's not much to say about the structure of it. It's still a catchy melody. But I guess I know why you got such a bad rating after those few votes despite the quality of the result.
The use of this main instrument and of this long and powerful dark bass (and also your breaks that stop the melodic instruments to make them re-enter in a brutal way) make this song get rid of the initial one's emotion. I mean, it's still catchy and quick, but you give it some accent of epicness and strength that it doesn't have in the first version. Cause actually, the original one stays really fluffy, light and amusing, almost ridiculous (not in a wrong way). And here, you propose something in another vein, with another signification, and that leads, on another hand, to the fact that the climbing melody lose a bit of weight as you replace the melody importance by a space atmosphere, and a sentiment of power.
Personally I have no problem with this. That's rather nice to see how a song can be transformated, while you mostly use the same notes. In a way, that's a useful remix.
Good and original job !
PS : I don't give you ten cause I'm not particularly sensitive to this song ;)
I'll change what i have to your words then it would be a better song that will have no bad ratings.
Together we will be great
Please contact me if you would like to use this in a project. We can discuss the details.