Pretty good beat, harmony, and overall idea, but watchout for chashing as you start to build up your instruments. Around 1:30 I really started to hear that, and it kinda killed the song, so watch out! You can make it complicated, just make sure that the notes you use are all based off each other. Don't try to fit 2 unrelated segments together. That's what it felt like you did, and it got a little messy as a result. Otherwise, you have a great idea and you did a good job mixing it. With some practice, and experience, you could be making really good stuff. :)
Thanks for comments!
You are right about it getting a bit clustered in the middle. That piano was put there just for the sake of variation; perhaps I will go back and remove it. I would rather the song feel a little static than ... unenjoyable.
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