i went through a bunch of your music but i admire this piece so far because it shows you are beginning to focus on actual progression and simplicity of sounds and layering. the background arp is cool i like the notes and scales it's in but it sounds very fake and all the sounds only magnify that detail which makes it sound like a house song from the 80s lol. umm the pitch bending thing going on at the second half, i can imagine if u did work on replacing most of the sounds it would be a really nice groove more over so. ah yes that pitch bending, i can imagine an acoustic guitar string with portamento on mono playing the same notes with reverb and delay, over that bass would sound neat with the background arp. the background arp is kinda too fat sounding, maybe lower the voices of the oscillator and compress and duck it behind all the sounds more. the pad is nice too but it seems to be too high and clashes with the arp, try transposing one of the oscs an octave lower, what program do you produce with anyway?
Wow, that was a lot of information. So, first things first, the ending was like 5 minutes of thought, going to be removed. I'm pretty much fixing everything. Next, I do need to work on the bass, and I will try that, it sounds like it might help. I will take everything you said into consideration. Finally, I use FL Studios. :D