You have a nice build up. The song isn't bad though. There is something about the bass though. It sounds as if it's reaching it's peak, which doesn't sound good. If it isn't reaching it's peak, maybe it's just the bass I don't like.
Keep at it.
I would suggest toning down the kick (maybe change it, it's kind of overpowering), toning down the echo ALOT, and fixing the wobble timing . It's also kind of repetitive. Good for a first try. 3/5 and 7/10 from me, chap.