I dislike the sounds used, all of them. The beginning could definitely use some better instrumentation, it would help a lot with -mixing- (not mastering). What sounds you use are as important as how you use them. The kick is way too loud and overbearing, it doesn't fit at all. I feel like a broken record telling people to learn about compressing limiting sidechaining and the like. It's very important. The clap is absolutely tacky and doesn't fit at all. I'm disliking the ride and the hatline, it's just too stale. I offbeat saw bass as a nice filter envelope, probably the best thing in the tune thus far. Again, a bit too stale, There's a lot you can do with such a sound, don't limit yourself.
Songs that are bound to repitition (like this one) needs some sort of hook. I know this is just a WIP, but nothing is catchy. You have to throw in some creative effects, -something- to grab attention... even for a WIP. No one's gonna come back to something that plays the same four notes over and over.
A good effort though, keep on keepin on and you'll get the hang of it. Happy producing. ;D
thanks very much for the critical response. though it looks like I am responding myself a bit late XD
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