NIce one bro!
you can spit better than JAY-Z! really though, you should make your voice more used in more feeling form and you can stop with the music used in too much. too much music and no voice. i'm not tryin' to criticize, but, just keepin' it real. but keep it up! ;)
THanks Man. I just felt inspiration when i made this
Please contact me if you would like to use this in a project. We can discuss the details.