i appreciate the fact that you are trying to emulate heavy metal but you are straying from it's roots. and what's with the pauses?
its good, but i would reccommend checking out some popular metal bands for inspiration, such as Iron Maiden, Disturbed, Pantera, Ozzy. i also reccomend the Big 4, Metallica, Megadeth, Anthrax and Slayer. the guitar also sounds a little tinny in the beginning, if you want to fix that.
The intro like enter the sandman metallica but it's ok. it's not the real guitar right?