Pretty nice concept and the beat was pretty strong, BUT:
Mastering is sucky, samples are pretty bad quality (Even if they are VEE) and the whole structure is more or less wrong. It doesn't flow well at all and there's far too much bass.
Although there's a part (2:45) which reaaaaly got my attention and sounded pretty awesome. Although the drums come in and completely demolished the feeling with the overpowering bass, and then that vocal sample came in for the 234876435th time and the whole thing just sounded repetitive and boring.
And 30 Hours? Piss off.
You definetly did not work on this song for 30 hours. You can tell by the production style. Everything is just repeated over and over again, and there's no mastering or mixing whatsoever (which takes exceptionally the most amount of time.)
If you can't get all of your listeners (especially the truthful ones) to enjoy your music, you won't go very far ;/
So i suggest you listen to some other versions of house instead of Dirty South and stuff like that, and get a better idea of how to build up, climax, and structure your music effectively.
Sorry to be a dick, but you won't get better scores without criticism to build upon, right?
With hope that you get better at house,
Dan Roth <33