Hmm, definatly not your best work, but i'll tell you what I really think, because holding back will not help you.
The beat was solid, here is my advice and personal thoughts.
The beat was solid as I said, however that rapid repeating noise started to get slightly irratating to listen to.
The blend of instruments was extremely unique, however this time I feel that the instruments didn't belong well together.
The song has intense potential, it has a lot of interesting sections that made me perk my ears for careful listening, it doesnt deserve what it got, its not that bad, don't let the others let you believe so.
You've just gotta keep going at it man, eventually you can rise above them all ^^.
Haha don't worry about it man, this song isn't entirely serious anyways ^__^ One of my friends one day was like "hey, make a retro song!" and I was like "well whats that?" and he was like "well, it has to have lots of hits in it and a crazy bassline".
So yeah :P Anyways, it's most of my other music that matters to me, but if you really think it has potential I might check into it a little more.