You were inspired by me? I'm so flattered! This is a good first try. It mostly sounds like a bunch of sounds smooshed together but as a producer I can see where you were going.
All you needed was a better melody and an actual beat. You have to use kicks that hit hard and snares that can keep the beat moving.
Just a lil' advice; choose sound effects sparingly. Don't just pick a few and throw thwm in there. They have to contribute something to the sound of the beat. All of the bubbles and too many things like that makes your beat sound like a kiddy toy. They distract you form the rest of the beat.
Keep making beats. Check out my beats too. Holla
aight, thanks man