okie, I'm gunna review as I go along, the intro was sounding nice, until the that synth came in 0:10, it's just a little bit to high pitched! maybe on the last note of the that synthy bit, carry it on, like u do later so it flows better.
1:35 I like that sound :D did you make it?
1:47 lol again with the high pitched noises.
2:03 you could try and fade that sound out a little better
I don't know what you think, but having a slow rythmic beat through this piece would add a lot of texture to it, and just generally make it sound nicer. try and find some nice clap samples XD