You did a good job on this song. With a little change, it could actually be a pretty awesome loop. Your drums were incredible. The melody at times seemed chopped. You should have some parts, espeally those near the end, be more fluid, constant notes, arpeggios, etc. Also, that little intro/outro bit didn't need to also be in the middle. And you used the voice too much in the beginning. The first few times it was cool, but then I started thinking "okay, this is getting rediculous!" If you took just the words "Nuclear Exterminate Music" from that part and placed it at different points in the song, it would be much better.