Not too bad
At the very beginning, I was really digging this. Sounded like a sort of emotional instrumental, possibly one that I would even consider using.
However, once the kicks and hats came in, it sounded a bit... Off compared to the intro part of the song.
Kicks were too silent, felt a little dumbed down compared to what they could have been, I'd say if they were louder and had more power in them it would sound much better altogether.
Hats are nice, nothing wrong going there, but the kicks are what really bother me in this instrumental.
There is always room for improvement, and I'd say spend a lot of time getting to know your song before you submit it, it's still something I am learning to do myself, because once I think I am finished one I am so tempted to just submit it. I'm not saying it's bad to submit them right away, but give it a listen quite a few times before you submit, but never hesitate to come to the audio portal for some criticism, you can only get better.
Also, about the gunshot... Felt a little strange, but hey, remember that you're doing music for yourself before you are doing it for anybody. Your music is your art man, it's your way of expressing yourself.
Could improve a little bit
For instance at the start I can hear something grainy, maybe the bass that is being a bit louder than it should be. Also doesn't sound too much like hip hop, sounds more like house, trance type music. The piano and drums are real simple and the bass doesn't sound extraordinary either sadly.
Sounds kind of like a melodramatic piece that is pretty sad and down feeling the whole time. Kind of makes me feel as if I had lost all the friends in the world and no one even cares that I was missing either. The gun shot at the end was also kind of random to me as well.
Overall, try to remove the grainy sound, and if you really want it to get more of a hip hop feel, try adding in some scratches, deeper bass notes, faster drums, and some other hip hop sounds as well.
Good luck on future pieces.
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Slightly off. The kick should be sidechained, because it feels like the kick is overwhelming all the other parts in the piece. The strings don't fill up your ears like they should, perhaps panning them more to left and right will fill them up. The piano is also very draggy and has a long release, which doesn't appeal for this song.
I felt like a lot of it was very same-ish and didn't change the feel, it was just that same in-the-dumps view. Also, I wouldn't classify it as Modern Hip Hop because it simply doesn't sound anything like it. I'd put it in something like Classical or Miscellaneous perhaps.
It's a very nice touch you're trying to deliver here, but it lacks edge and personality. It needs some recurring motif or lead synth to bring it along that extra notch. It is the unrelenting mood of a man about to kill himself, which I thought was overly dramatic and pretentious. You need some light atmosphere to contrast with the dark.
The atmosphere is dark and gloomy, which brings the attention of the listener, but it doesn't take it anywhere from there. We need to be transported in a journey, not just left listening to music stay at the same pace and in the same mood.
I can tell you have a lot of potential, but there's some things that need to be fixed and thought about, such as: theme, content, progression of the song. Then you can transport us in your world through the mind of someone who is contemplating suicide. Thanks for sharing with us.
--Production-- = 10/20
--Experience-- = 6/20
--Style-- = 10/20
--Wow Factor-- = 3/20
--Personal Tilt-- = 5/20
OVERALL SCORE: 34/100
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really liked it
downloaded it. sounds like it could go in silent hill.
Please contact me if you would like to use this in a project. We can discuss the details.