Actually pretty alright :3
The production on this is actually sufficiently good. You've managed to synch the vocals with the beat pretty darn well. I actually like how loud the vocals are, they aren't too loud, which is the sure sign of an amateur. I would tweak it maybe 0.1% louder, but that's about it. The sample you used for the chorus (well, the part between your verses) didn't contain a catchy hook, or anything, it was just a beat. I just felt like that took away from the catchiness of it.
This is actually more entertaining than most of your other submissions. It actually has a message along with it, that you really have feelings with. I think it's because you're hating on an idea, instead of an actual person. There's certain things that need to change in this world, and it's better to hate on bad things and concepts than on bad people. Because bad people are still people, and they can change.
The style was very rockin', lots of distorted guitar. I felt you sort of bucked the trend on this one, which was kind of good, and refreshing. It's good to do that sometimes, however the snare that does that thing before each 4 bars begin is cheesy... that "doo doo doo doo dodododo ddddddo" thing, if you know what I mean. It's overused, really.
Your lyrics were of higher quality towards the beginning of the song, but at the end it kind of drooped in quality and your flow got less dope. The lack of a recurring motif, or line, kinda makes this a forgettable track. It would be nice to just repeat a line during the breaks, so that you kinda come away from this track with something.
Probably my favourite of yours so far, but still there's a lot of improvement to be made. There's someone who raps similar to you recently: The Streets. Look him up and see how he does things. He's pretty good actually. Thanks for letting me listen, well done.
--Production-- = 17/20
--Experience-- = 15/20
--Style-- = 16/20
--Wow Factor-- = 16/20
--Personal Tilt-- = 15/20
OVERALL SCORE: 79/100
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