I actually like this. i was not expecting such a great song. Not trying to understate your skill. I think this song would sound amazing with real vocals and stuff. Even though im not into the pop like HelloGoodbye and such i think this would sound great if you gave it a more punk sound; BUT that's just the style of music i enjoy. This song is still great regardless. Hope that isn't confusing. Good job!
Please contact me if you would like to use this in a project. We can discuss the details.