Very interesting song and I did mostly enjoy it.
The only things that bug me are the kick and snare drums. The kick drum is barely audible in the middle of the song and the snare drum is only a noise snare and doesn't feel strong enough.
If you could make the kick drum a bit more pronounced and give the snare drum a bit more tail and power, I think you'd have it made!
Please contact me if you would like to use this in a project. We can discuss the details.