The bells should be more dynamic at the beginning, and start softer. I'd bring in the voices that come in at 0:48 a phrase later and add a phrase with just the low string melody as the voices make for some weird tones. 2:16 is a bit sudden. In fact, I don't like that portion of the song at all. Too much unrelated stuff going on at once. Charles Ives didn't write video game music. Cut some of the parts. The 2:50 transition is nice. I really like the part starting at 3:08. In fact, I relatively enjoyed it from there on out. The trombone synths sound a little funny at times. Love the voices at the end.
So apart from a few funny phrases, transitions, and synths, this is sounding really good. You'll probably want to add some effects to make the transitions smoother. Of course, all this is just my opinion. Hope it helps.
Thanks a lot :)
Yeah, this was a moment of inspiration for us. Killer actually extended the part from around 3 minutes onwards, so He'll be happy to hear you liked his brass :D
But, we are going to completely recreate the song anyway. We really need advice and improvements, which you've gave us :D This took about 3 months, at least starting it did, the brass extension didn't take long on Killer's side (I think) as he used the patterns we already created. Oh yeah, it's also worth knowing that this is gonna (although it started off as the OST) be sliced up so that it can be used during the game :D
Please contact me if you would like to use this in a project. We can discuss the details.