I've heard your song, but it lacks on instruments/piano notes to be a that good song, but I like it anyway...
You reviewed me earlier and added my song deadly bond to your faforet songs, can you review my newest song on youtube? the link is :
(http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=LGc4l 9qxjgw) and say if I improved and how to improve it more..
A few things...
No real phrasing structure, which put it down quite a bit in my book because it lacked direction. Whether you're trying to create a mood of "Bitter Remorse" or not, I didn't feel any sort of mood because, at the end, the song didn't feel finished. Give me a sense of purpose in each note, carrying me to the next, and you'll create your mood.
My advice? Put some bass chords beneath it, for two reasons.
1. You'll give yourself another source of rhythm, which drives melody. For two things to function together, they have to be in time, so a nice set of low chords, repetitive or no, will provide what you lack in driving the piece.
2. You'll give it a depth of sound, another element for the audience to go "Oh, that's pleasant-sounding", other than just high piano notes. This adds to the overall effect of the piece, and puts it beyond the "messing around on the keyboard" sound into something with meaning and texture.
So to really set this piece apart, throw in a set of chords, A-A-D-A-E-D-E-A repeating or whatever (minor, of course) and take it away at crucial moments. Heck, vary your volume while you're at it. Nobody wants to listen to something that never gets louder or softer.
And there you have it.
Thanks I dont really know what to call my songs. But I want to say thanks for the really in depth review.