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The Bus

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I would really like an opinion of some sort on this song, I still have no idea how to make music

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Homemade!

This piece is a great improvement of general quality compared to another of your song's i reviewed. The piece is excitng and interesting your music feels very homemade to me. You utilise your voice well the stop and start and chopped voice works well i like 0:52 the change in tone of your voice and contrast with the beat and high bells really works well. I like the back story to the song which i gather is some guy talking to someone he has seen for a long time on a bus he uses. It seems to be quite understandable thing to do.

Overall it is lacking in many ways but a lot better in many as well. Im sure at points the voice could be chopped better to stop "clicks pops, breaths" and other unnecessary sounds being included. Also the beat has too much of a generic sound.

Overall impressive!


farfenwaffle responds:

Thank you! I was going for "nervous guy talking to girl on the bus"

I will focus on the voice work, audio editing is a bit hard for me and I can't figure out that inexplicable clicking noise.

How does one make a beat less generic?


Soft influx

I guess the voice sounds alright chopped as it is anyways which is cool I suppose. However the beat as a whole seems to flow soft but wow this doesn't seem to be great but just something normal anyways that I might hear here. The tune sounds alright I suppose. Not bad or anything.

The drums sound good here too. The voice seems to move up and down as a beat right? Not bad at all. The xylophone seems to be doing its own thing which is cool I suppose. The full beat as a whole moves forward and kind of draws you into the fold and makes you want to like it.

Overall, it's not too bad.

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farfenwaffle responds:

"not bad" alright. Thanks!

Your review is pretty great, as opposed to "not too bad" :)


Flowing Problems

There were disjointed moments where I could hear the breath in the mic and the stop change in music. But, I liked the "oddness" of it. It's very unique and interesting to listen to! Also, half way through the song I would have liked a stronger explosion of sound to really add that extra "something" to it.


farfenwaffle responds:

Thank you, I'll try to focus on consistency. I've been working on keeping the breath away, I've been using a sock now. Thank you again!


Yes... I like it

Awesome, make another please! IT JUST DOSE NOT HAVE THAT GOOD OF A BEAT


farfenwaffle responds:

This beat rools


Didn't like it

Maby its just not my style but i just thought nothing really happend in the song, but what you did have felt really underdeveloped to me. I dnt like the speech in it at all was kinda freaky .... Im not gona vote cause i think it would be unfair because its not my style.


farfenwaffle responds:

Hey, no problem. Maybe it would have gone somewhere if I had made it a bit more danceable or something? How do you make a song to places?

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Credits & Info


Listens
698
Downloads
39
Votes
8
Score
3.38 / 5.00

Uploaded
Jan 9, 2011
6:08 AM EST
Genre
Pop
File Info
Song
5.3 MB
4 min 36 sec

Licensing Terms

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