Good first start!
Sounds like you're well on your way to writing trance. Not a trance artist myself, but here's some constructive criticism:
00:26 - great transition! This next part seems much smoother/refined than the intro
2:21 - dunno how to describe the feeling here. Not exactly dark, nor completely free, but I like it!
00:00-00:26 - this part seems kinda just random things tossed together. Maybe some more order here?
2:20 transition seems out of place, but following portion is great.
3:15ish great distortion used here. great lead into the next part.
I think you should aim for a unifying "theme". a good part of this seems kind of random beats put together. There is sort of a consistent rhythm sometimes, but once you leave it, it kinda gets random. As an experiment, it's great, it utilized different types of music/rhythm, etc. For a song, not too great.
Seems kinda dark for a piece saying "I can fly". Kinda expecting an inspirational piece.
Please contact me if you would like to use this in a project. We can discuss the details.