screaming aint my style
even tho i lison to tuns of scremo i disliked this. prob do to lyrics. lack real debth thin agen this seems like you where just trying to try it so i wont judge you on lyrics but if you do keep doing this try to make ur lyrics more complex and simple (easy to understand but if you really think about it its all metaphors )
but scraming itself. wasent to bad sounds scratchy its to distorted for me to really tell. just makesure u force ur voice trew chords but not to where you fill them. but im sure you knew that. guitar is to distorted and uses to much mids. ur voice fills the meds so have the guitar tuned deeper or higher thin ur voice or balance it better another thing is reverb on drums and ur voice but not the guitar?
see whats wrong there.
drums are nice ill give you that
choreds that play near the end in the bg sound good the scream at the end you pulled the mic a bit to far away.
im sorry for all the typos or confution . pm (il reply faster) or reply to this if i can help in any way or explain anything!
ps if you have a good singing voice . dont scream you are gunna lose it if you start.