It's pretty good. You just need some pumping bass playing and thumping drumming to make this tune huge.
My only advice would be to multitrack as you can tell you're playing whilst singing. That way you can do the guitar to a click and it wouldn't be out of time in places.
Your singing is good. Sounds kinda like Brandon Boyd's style. I think he's a cunt, but I won't hold that against you.
Lol thats fucking great i was laughing my ass off at the Brandon comment but at the same time I'm flattered, thanks finally someone took the time to give my stuff a listen. I'm planning on releasing as much stuff before i go to army. Again many thanks made my day!
Please contact me if you would like to use this in a project. We can discuss the details.