You could smoothen out some of the sounds a little, perhaps give it more of an intro, make it start off slow and fade into the bulk of the song. Maybe make it slightly less echoish (If thats a word). Its better than all the poops I used to make. Most of the crap I made was just audio warping in audacity and more often than not it just sounded like I shoved my microphone up my asshole and then shat it out again D:
I definately like where this song was going though, it would actually do really well in a game. If you shortened it down and made it loopable so the end of the song makes a smooth transition back into the begining it would make a really good video game loop, I could even use it in somethin. Nice song dude!
Please contact me if you would like to use this in a project. We can discuss the details.