Response to Longenuity
The second bass note should be a G, and the third should be an A (although the C# you have works fine too).
Anyway, the song sounded fine, just need to add more structure to it. Give an intro, some variations to the melody, something like that. It's a good start though.
Ah, thanks so much bro. I tried it out and it sounds much better. And thanks for the tips, I'll get started on a full version as soon as I have time. (:
the chords sounded off... the second one in particular and like a few others...
Orly? Is there any way you can show me which chords? They don't sound off to me.. I asked a couple of friends and the chords don't sound off to them either.