nice

i like the beat xD

Constructive Criticism Time?!

Alrighty, then! First of all, let me say that, while you do have quite a way to go, you're already off to a good start. Like, you've got it where it matters, which is in the composition. So everything I'm about to say is just technical stuff. A checklist, if you will.

(this is just the long way of saying "you've got potential, kid", but since that's so overused it's kind of lost its meaning. But I really mean it here. Honestly)

- First of all, watch your mixing. I can hear clipping right when the strings set in at the beginning of the song. If worst comes to worst, just turn the master down. But I would look at checking each channel to make sure they're mixed evenly.
- Next, add some dynamics! Don't just buildup and breakdown by adding and removing tracks! Use volume sweeps! Use filter sweeps! Snare rolls! Techno is all about repetition, but proper use dynamics make the repetition not boring!
- Also, I would look at adding some effects to your mix. For example, that hi-hat sounds really dry. Add some reverb! Add some delay! You don't have to go overboard, but just something to fill out the space and make it sound less dry would be greatly appreciated.
- Finally, I would look into expanding your knowledge of chord progressions! From what I can hear, you're alternating between two chord progressions. The first is way overused these days. The second has been way overused since the late 1600s. No, that isn't a problem for you now, but I see so many songs just stay in those chord progressions, apparently oblivious of all of the other options available. Don't be like the other 90% of Newgrounds! Break out of the 6-4-1-5 box! (not that it's off-limits, later you can go back to it when you feel it is best suited for conveying your message)

Sorry, I guess I went a little overboard with the constructive criticism. I hope you appreciate it, and I hope I didn't offend you. As said before, you have the talent, these are just some techniques to make your stuff sound that much better. :-)