Well I wished you had posted the lyrics for us to read first of all. The vocals sound good for the most part, and the lyrics sound creative from what I can hear.
The guitar part wasn't bad for the most part. Probably the greatest part about the song is that you added additional vocal notes over the top of the track, which sounded really great.
The only hole I really see from the song is any form of percussion - so if you're looking for something to add, I would definitely start there. Then if it still feels empty add a bass line to it.
The piece you have here is certainly a great start though, and it doesn't sound bad at all really. It's certainly one of the more original things I've heard in the audio portal, and I commend you for doing your own thing.
No comment on the scream at the end, lol...not sure that really belonged.
Overall a decent track. Keep up the good work, and I'm interested to hear what you end up adding to this.
Ah, it was originally supposed to be a folk song and that's why I didn't want any drums but as I moved along it became more... Well whatever it is, instead of folk. It's a really awkward song for me, yet natural at the same time, being from an area where bluegrass runs rampant.
Yeah, vocal harmonies, layered vocals and such are some things that I love doing but not too many of my NG submissions have them. My love for the sound of it comes from harmonizations in music like The Ink Spots, Ray Charles, other older artists and also is highly influenced by orchestral music and System of a Down.
About the scream: I got this idea, back when I started working on my new album (which this song belongs to), to make a separate album with songs that are about the feelings that the bosses in Metal Gear Solid 3 are named after; The Pain, The Fear, The End, The Fury, The Sorrow and The Joy. After some deliberation I decided to do the idea but include the songs in the album instead of separate. So, the song is all about pain, there's a painful scream at the end, I feel good about having it there. Plus, it helps to tie in with the song that comes after it in the album; The Fear (which is up on NG).