thanks for choosing my track for your song man.
the lyrics are great. they fit with the beat really well.
keep it up
Thanks man :} For the next English song I'll use another of your wonderful tracks...
I'd have to say, compared to your last song (in english) This one is by far, way better! Your words are a lot more consistent, and the way you string out the syllables (though sometimes with a tad incorrect pronunciation, such as in 'photography') actually helps the piece because it works with the style that your accent creates. The treble sound in the vocals contrasts to the rest of the track really well, although as you said, a better microphone would've helped a lot, (I'd recommend an Audio-Technica AT 2020 USB condenser microphone, for two reasons, it's cheap, and it yields surprisingly good quality for a USB mic.
a couple comments on the lyrics:
In the beginning i would say 'for all the ones who made us feel alive', instead of 'for all the ones who made us alive.'
Also, I think your pronunciation of 'picture' could be improved. If you added (a little) more emphasis and anger to the first syllable and mushed the next one, it would sound better. like this 'PICshure' (also, try to make the transition from the c to the t smoother)
now, for some notes on the music:
I'd take the instrumental track and put it into your favorite editor, and then turn up the bass. A LOT! I think that your track would be significantly better if your beat was a lot more intrusive. A good solid 'THUMP' THUMP' would help.
Overall, I loved it! except for the bass, you only really need to change some technical stuff.
Thanks, dude :} Yeah, I tried to avoid big English mistakes ^^ Next time I promise it will be better ! Obviously, I'll buy another mic, cause this one sucks T_T
For lyrics : Yep, I see what you mean. Prunonciation of "picture" need an improvement... And for the beat, I can't help : I didn't make the track...
Well thanks again man ! :D