As a start for a song it is really good!
But it sounds like a bridge that or a refrain that is going on and on.
What i would do is plan for segments.
What happens often is that yo make something like this something that sound really good. But because it is a stumble upon you don't know what to do with it....
Do you just keep it ... hence the upload of 58 seconds.
Think in structures of a song think intro couplet refrain bridge outro
Now you can have refrains bridge and couplet anywhere and in any order between the intro and the outro or leave the intro out and start with a couplet or refrain from the get go.
This is good what you have done you get full score form me in the hope that you succeed in making it into a full song.
By the way you have put it under pop and that is fine but it has a lot of funk elements. The baseline and the rhythm guitar are really funky!
I have to say this was a good song, can't deny that, but i agree with "Ecgtheow" seems like the song is leading on to a big climax but ends shortly.
It's kind of short and it doesn't feel like it has any direction. It sounds like an introduction to something larger.