Be true to the music.
Although this piece sounds good, people are looking for epic. If you are going to compose music, any genre, you have to be true to the music, and true to the music within your mind. Give it some "robust-ness". Make the intangible, tangible. Let people hear one piece that can be interpreted twenty different ways.
Nice beat, good harmony. It gives the listener a feeling of power.
The drums could use some improvement. They're the heartbeat of the piece. Make sure to capture that heartbeat.
4/5 and 8/10
Try to improve, you sound like you may know what you're doing, or at least have an intermediate knowledge of how to piece together music. figure out your strengths and go with them.
Thanks for the review, I like the detail you go into. I have no knowledge on composing music, but I can indeed read music. This review is exaclty what I have been looking for making my improvements. I did have a feeling I do need to working my percession more and I will with future projects. Again Thanks for your input.