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<sharpeye>inner thoughts

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this is one of my first attempts at trance, PLEASE RATE AND REVIEW ^_^


It was a bit quiet

Very good for your first song man. But There needs alot of work to be done. It had no musical feeling. It seemed like it was just random. But the beat was at least clear. I was a bit confused when it went quiet for a while, with just the beats going. With Fruity loops5 is such a powerful program. Explore it :)

Nice start...

Well... i guess this is not trance BUT i think it's a good base to actually build the song better. I know that what I'm about to say is one of the worst things you can actually say to someone's music but this kind of reminds me of dunkey rubarb from aphex twin... back to the review: i enjoyed the shift in the tempo, i though that the "tressinas" (dunno how to say it in english) where very interesting in the begining... but there's filling missing (a pad of some sort... i prefer to leave it at your own taste) and some sort of climax that is just missing (again aphex twin kind of thing)... regarding the beat, it's of very intesresting use BUT the final clash plate sequence doesn't suit in the music neither brings the ending that you where looking for... either way a word of advise (though i really don't care about it... but some users do): check where to put your music first... and people here tend not to like to inovate that much... i hate that :P

isharpeyei responds:

thank you for your thoughts, will get right on it and continue to work on new songs, I HAVE NO IDEA WHO THE APHEX TWINS ARE >_< :P

Fruity Loops Begginer...

I can tell you're starting out just by the sound of it. The song was a bit too quiet, and the second synth, the one that came in after the drums, doesn't really fit for 'trance'. The drums you chose could have used a bit more life. I liked the hi-hat beat. You needed a baseline.
Anyways, good job for just starting out. Keep working at it. Hopefully you'll get better faster than I do.

isharpeyei responds:

thanks! ill be sure to keep workin and making new songs as well

p.s. you should heard the first version, IT WAS HORRIBLE

what the...

welllllll where to start. It had really no sense of direction, and no flow. It seems you just plugged in a bunch of random notes and called it a day. This "song" lacks "fullness" and a beat that can lead it along.

The beat itself is basic and becomes diverse at random times, and it almost makes no sense.

The "melody" is where i really got confused. It didn't have any musical structure whatsoever to it (at least that i could tell) and it really seemed like it was just random notes. Put in some strings, make the song flow, and try again.

Overall i'd have to say this wont make the cut. It's not even trance. If anything i'd put it under techno. I hope i wasn't too critical in this review, but im only trying to help you improve and create better songs. Don't take this all the wrong way. We all have to start somewhere. Just keep on trying, and through reviews and more experience, you will improve.

Hope this helped, and feel free to check out my music. Keep trying! Oh and what program are you using? Fl studio? Reason? Other?

DJ Zeeber

isharpeyei responds:

hey!, well where to start, thanks for being honest and telling me the worst parts about my song, its good to know what i needa work on, (you shoulda heard the first version :P) and yes i am using FL studio 5, its much easier then anything i have ever used, also you caught me, i was having a hard time with ideas so i just...clicked buttons ^_^, hopefully ill find more structure, THANK YOU :D

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3.37 / 5.00

Nov 13, 2005
12:43 PM EST
File Info
3.4 MB
3 min 42 sec

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Please contact me if you would like to use this in a project. We can discuss the details.