Enchanting, but something is missing.
The compression seems to be a bit thick in the mix, but the idea is great. The phrases are good, but I think they need more dynamics, not to say it is boring, but I do believe it sounds a bit repetitive. I tend to have this issue when writing music, I make the phrases too long, and people do tell me it gets boring. It needs some heavy angry guitar. I would try to mix the drums in both Left and Right channels as well.
I would work on this one a bit more, but I do love it!
Dynamics can be done, surely. This is not a metal song though, that was never the goal. This is a conversion from metal to ...whatever this is.
It really should be 1:50 but i dragged out because I enjoy it so much. Its just repeated parts.
Check out Number One if you will, that's our latest metal song. And the other tracks marked (XPLCT) are songs with vocals. So I'd look out for those too.
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