i can understand where you're coming from. Great English for a Frenchman such as yourself! I've spoken to many, and by comparison, you're pretty good.
a couple of suggestions: you said :
"But I tried to find answers in Underground" in the chorus, when it would probably be better to say "but i tried to find the answers underground." also, this line seems like a bit of a non-sequitur along side the rest of the chorus (and then it wouldn't rhyme.) find - underground, (i believe you said 'found' in the song the first time to make it rhyme, but it made it grammatically incorrect, if you don't mind me saying. I'd recommend re-wording the last line of the chorus.
aside from that, there's not much else except a few grammar errors,
'Stop ! No more game
I don't play anymore !!
Stop ! No more shame
I WAS OUT OF THERE BEFORE !!!'
'game' should be 'games'
and 'I don't play anymore' should be 'I wont play anymore.' (or 'i don't want to play anymore,' but that's kind of long.
'Stop ! No more shame' is fine
and 'I WAS OUT OF THERE BEFORE !!!' doesn't make sense, you should re-word it a bit, but keep before for the sake of rhyming.
Overall, great imagery!
I like it!
Oh, glad you liked it :D ! I'm trying to improve my accent :p
- For the Chorus : yes, in the beginning, I wrote "tried to found", and then, I realized it wasn't correct... I replaced it, but in the first chorus, I forgot and said "found"... I'm going to re-record it ^^" The same for "(In) underground"
- For "no more gameS", I said the "S" but forgot in the lyrics ^^
- "I was out of there before"... Argh, it's nonsense ? I don't want to record again all the verses T_T it's been a pain in ass...
Well, thanks, I'll send you a Private Message when I've finished it !
Please contact me if you would like to use this in a project. We can discuss the details.