it was pretty good
but the bass dont fit whith the melody...
I should deflinately fix that!
Good but some parts not so good
I really liked it but then i heard some flat notes which seemed like they didn't fit. i think if you fixed those then this would b an amazing sond\g.
I have fixed that problem in my style, you wont hear it again.
lokks like u r just missin a note... thats good but sometimes... ur bass is not from this music...
Knowing these facts
You've got something going here.
I think you need to stop and hear the melody you are going for and embellish it a bit maybe. Tone down your levels and maybe add a snare somewhere. Obviously thats a personal taste thing but i feel it would help break up your song and bring out the melody. Maybe have a bass that also accents the melody because this one sounds off.
As it is now, it just seems like noise on a beat. Your structure is great, just try and work on the musical aspect. Sometimes i mute the beat and just work on the melody for a while, the beat will always fit when ur done.
So thats my two cents.
Keep it up!
I am totally working on it I made it maybe too "ARGH my ears" style :D