A little quiet
Perhaps it is me, but I think that the violin is a little quiet here - messing with the record settings will help you out, if you're trying to get that right. As with that, the acoustics of the room where you are recording probably didn't help - something to bear in mind for next time.
Slow, mournful and a little boring towards the end, I would have said that this needed something else - some backing, possibly from additional strings, or even a piano, organ or percussion accompaniment. If I were to hazard a guess at the accompaniment in percussion, I would suggest the low rumble of the Kettle Drums, which would really add something to the piece.
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