i don't really write a lot of reviews based on improvements for songs and i'm personally not a dj......but you should really go back and make sure all the parts of the song, the primary voice and secondary voices are clearly spoken. for example, in section 00:47 through 00:50 i can make out the "do you know where you're going?" part but then this second voice comes in and says"......don't see me........misery" or maybe "please don't leave", the "......" being the parts i can't make out. another example: "you travel too far........this is it for you i feel".
other parts don't gramatically make sense. ex:"i got them to you the traps that sprung my dear" i take it you mean "got you through the traps"?
hope this helps :P
Here, I'll give you a 10.
Really well done. I would love more like this.
Thanks a bunch! I have one more you might like. Watch for it.