I like it so far. I must say you get an A+ for originality. Keep the intro in my opinion. It is unique for one thing, and it also serves as a hook. Much like a literature hook draws the reader in, it draws the audience in to continue listening to the work.
I must say that this is really cool. Keep working on it. I look forward to hearing the final.
Also, if you have a moment, could you check out my new song? I am in need of some feedback.
Thanks, and keep up te good work!
Please contact me if you would like to use this in a project. We can discuss the details.