Not bad, but needs a little work

I think that you are hampered by the acoustics of the hall you were recording in, as this does change the dynamic of the song itself. A well written piece and it was performed well, though the recording equipment could have been a little better, since there were one or two occurrences of static in the early going.

I think that you also need a drummer, just to give it a little more of a boost, to distract a little from the earlier mistakes "Whoa-oh-oh", for example. There might be self confidence issues there and it's a case of being confident enough to belt the song out at the right, consistent volume and tempo all the time.

Don't get me wrong, there is some real talent here, but it's a case of refining it better. Good luck.

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Could use improvement

-It's a little difficult to hear in some areas of the song. Not sure if you have any way of allowing the vocals to be more defined and clear. It would improve on this a good deal if it was clearer.

-As mentioned by Boux the guitar is out of tune but seeing as it's just the instrument you are using and isn't computer generated it's an allowable flaw. But it wouldn't be a bad idea to jump on a chance to get a new guitar if you are going to pursue acoustic musical work.

-Introduction was well paced but the vocals didn't flow off of it as well as they could have. Once the lyrics end the playoff was about half as long as the lyrical part so some structure adjustment to make the ending more even with the introduction.

-Overall it could use some improvement but you are starting to get in the right direction. It's a lot better than some of the first stuff from you that I listened to but I still think with some practice you can be even better.

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That guitar needs tuning : O

but you strum on sing well.