On the seashore
-I really like where you are going with this. I have this picture of kids playing on the seashore with waves crashing down. A little sandcastle in the wake with parents not too far behind in the background. It could really go either way after this though. You could have more joyous occurances or have a tragic event befall the situation and bring in darker undertones.
-But I like keeping the joyous atmosphere in this case since it just would make everyone happier in the end. I'm not saying to keep everything the same since it would make it more repetitive but adding more of that drum that you were using would be nice. Mixed with the melody i'm assuming it would sound great.
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Thank you for the review. I am going to keep it on the lighter, happier side.
I see you went for a somewhat soothing feel with this. You did pretty well.
There's not much I have to complain about, but there are some big issues.
First off, it's a bit too loud. Ambient songs should not be in-your-face, they should be in the back of your head, calming you down (or freaking you out, whichever feeling you want to bring out). And by loud I don't only mean I had my speakers on too high, but the sounds you've used should be a bit toned down.
The second issue is that towards the end, it seems a bit cluttered and too energetic. Again, considering you went for the soothing feel of a seashore, it should be rather relaxed. Try not to use the synthetic sound you've used to create sort of a rhythm, but use something else. Samples of bongos, or something like that. And just tone it down. Focus on making it relaxing.
Seeing as it's a WiP I won't criticize on the ending, though it ends abruptly.
Review Request Club
Thank you for your review. I will definitely take your suggestions into consideration.
Since you say this is a work in progress I won't be rating this as if this was the full song itself. But I got to say this was very well done, in my opinion. It managed to keep me relaxed and also gave me a feeling that if I was actually near a seashore. Adding the sound of kids laughing was something brilliant!
I would recommend you in adding the sound of the sea in the final version of the song, then this will give a perfect sensation of a seashore when somebody listens to this.
Conclusion: For now you've done such a nice song, Keep up the good work!
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[Review Request Club]
WOW! Thank you so much! I've been kind of stuck on where to go from here, whether I should keep going in this style (may get boring), or I should use what I have as an intro and fade in a soft ambient piano, which I plan to do once I find the right sound I am looking for. If you have any ideas, please PM me.
Thank you again!