Tune it up.
Bro, the general idea is cool, but the vocals in the chorus are totally out of tune. You should invite somebody to sing the chorus (maybe a girl). Don't get offended, OK?
No offense taken. Feedback is good, even if the person is trying to tear you down. The chorus isn't mixed very well either, so maybe if I mixed the vocals better it would have sounded better then too. Anyways, thanks for the feedback.