Hey man Pretty good

I know you are trying a story with this one.
Now the problem here is that the chords you keep playing for a long time don;t take you anywhere. It stays the same 2 chords.
The emotion is there in many parts but the basic 2 chords stay just that in the beginning.
Now at the ending you start to play the piano more but there you completely loose the chords.
The bass guitar is that one thing that is provide with great abundance by plugins so there isn't really a need to play that for real right now.
The strings sound pretty good.

To tell a story just remember that as in a book or film it has a beginning a middle and an end. That is the basis.
Now the middle can be cut up in section where there is room for all sort of events involving: love, grief, happiness, anger, fighting, screaming, contemplation, Self reflection, pauses, Beautiful silence, or even awkward pauses. How you build that is up to the creator.

It is great to look at history of modern music and finding out how at one point there was a basic scheme for many a song. It was Roy Orbinson that actually took all of those earlier rules and created stories and songs with structures that were previously not done. But they worked and they told stories too.

Keep on going you will get there! What program do you work with?

8/10

Cheers IIPhase