this has a lot of potential man, for the chorus I would suggest using autotune just to give it a little more of a produced sound and take the edge off.
I'd also eq the backups a bit so they sit in the mix better, failing that, have a listen back and re=record 'em so they sit better with the mix.
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I give it a 9 to break the chain of 8's~
I'm normally not a hiphop person at all. Really. You give me some techno/dance and I'll rock your world.
But this stuff is real man. The lyrics are good, and the beat and instruments go with what you're trying to say.
I do have to criticize the voice recording... It's a bit too clear. perhaps you could change the voice recording to a .wav file, and important into your synth or mixing software and add reverb or something? It just seems a bit flat that's all. Your song is very smooth, some reverb and the vocal's should be right along with it.
Intro is to die for~ You really spoke with the tone and beat as well as your lyrics.
thanks man, yeah this song is probably one of my favs. although i do wish i coulda made the vocals better. Take care!
love the beat, good lyrics.. Keep it up bro!
your back up vocs are off. you should add a light reverb during the chorus. at least you got a track you can bump
Its like, deep
This is a very meaningful song, the lyrics have impact man
I like the keys, and the strings to the song they add more to it and change the perspective of the genre. the other elements in the song are mixed so well i barely notice them ae.
And now to crit: the only thing that bugs me (please dont take this the wrong way) is the vocals, they need to be a little smoother, and ever so slightly softer if you know what i mean, and that echo needs to be as well. but other than that... fantastic
yeah i have a tiny problem with the vocals, but everytime i try to fix it it doesnt come out right, so im leaving this lol. thanks for the review yo!
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