You can't take our freedom
This needs a whole lot of work. First off I can barely here what you are saying it sounds like you are really far away. The beat that was playing was so loud over your voice I couldn't hear it even more. Then the beats in general sound like a 2 year old is hitting random notes. My suggestion to you is try to get a basic beat down. Also make it to where your voice can be heard. Better luck next time.
Let freedom ring!
This is what I went to war for! To fight for the freedoms of every man, woman, child in America.
The song itself is not good, but your message is spot on!
Please contact me if you would like to use this in a project. We can discuss the details.