It's not bad
I kinda like it. It's definitely messy and very abstract, but I can tell you were going for that so it works well for itself I think. I love experimental hip-hop like this :) Good job, mate.
A bit choppy, or should I say chippy.
In my opinion, this piece started roughly and got better. The first 50 seconds seemed painful. 1:05 to 1:20 was better but then it just fell off track. Hopefully you can try to improve this because right now it is not worth listening to. I rated it a 2/5