Very much improved!
This song is basically better then your previous counterpart. The cymbals added to the feel, and the melody itself is excellent! My only complaint: 1:13 through 1:29. It just felt like empty space and wasted time. It's the only thing that kept you from getting a 10. Try not to do that kind of thing EVER again.
the thing is that the tempo slows down at that point and if i added anything directly behind it it would have stayed at 27bpm so i had to add that space i am sorry that it was that long though.