Even though it sounds cheap, you did an amazing job making this song.
Although I don't personally enjoy the industrial guitar sound, I found the mix of it and the piano quite enjoyable (maybe I like industrial more than I realize)
I thought the melody was great, as well as the builds, fills, and drums.
You also had great variation in the song, from the piano (i.e. :14-:25) to the guitar (i.e. :39). There was also near-perfect balance between the parts, as well as a pretty good ending
However, the variation was only between the instrument playing the melody, and I found that having that through most of the 2:47 of this song got pretty repetitive and, while not being boring, didn't make me want to listen much longer.
All in all, this was a great song, just that the melody was overused
very good, very epic in many ways. it remids me quite a bit of linkin park in a very good way. keep it up, i would enjoy hearing more of your tunes.
Please contact me if you would like to use this in a project. We can discuss the details.