well
the chorus is terribly boring and un-catchy
you try too hard to rhyme alot and its very obvious.
i like when people can form sentencing while rhyming alot though so you get points there
you need to have more emotion in your songs
i feel like you are just reading off the paper with some rhythm and you dont even know what you are saying. and because you dont have any feeling in what you say i dont believe anything you say in the song about any drugs or drinks or anything. the recording quality isnt bad. its not good but it works for something like this.
4/10
2/5