LB - Dying In California

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I wrote this in California, somewhat with the idea that of, if there was no money in my pockets, and only the beach to go to. I would be okay dying in California. Sitting on the side streets, playing an instrument for money, just to buy food.

So anyways, this isn't just my dream, but a dream of a girl I know. She wants nothing more then to be in California. I'm not sure why, but she does. So, to you, may you make it to California someday.

Track 4 of my new album coming out.

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Good song.

Sound'd really touching.

Lublub194 responds:

Thanks Brah.

Very good, but short and lifeless

LOVED the piano, and the way the velocity changes made in fade in and out and the drums were absolutely amazing. Very skilled and added a lot to the song. It was definitely a good song, albeit a bit too short. It kind of built up to something and the ended on a cliffhanger right as it got to what I would have liked to have heard for a couple more minutes! If there's going to be a full-length version on your album I'll welcome it with eager ears.

My only complaint is that you really need to start working on your dynamics in your acoustic instruments. Especially on the guitar, in this song. The different between playing the same velocity on every note and having an ever so slight difference here and there can really make a song sound much more alive and significantly less robotic. Here's what you can do in Reason: highlight all the notes on your guitar track, then go in the F8 windows go to tools > velocity > random (I'd say about 20% would be good) > apply. Then, just listen to what such a simple and subtle change can do to your song :) It can really do a lot for a song in some cases, and I think this would be a piece that could really benefit from it.

Other than that, very well done and I can't wait for the album!

Lublub194 responds:

Always have worked on the dynamics in the accoustic. Not sure what you mean by "Start" but sure.

You heard my discussion on the random velocity thing...

Doubtfully more...

I thought the drums turned out well too, however that's a personal opinion.

Anyways, thanks for the review. And you'll have to wait for the album. AHA!

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Jul 4, 2010
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