Not quite there!
I liked the beginning and the beat is really great! The ending is a little weak. I think that you were trying to "fade out" but the "doot doot" at the end may not have been the best idea! I really think you are heading in the right direction! Keep up the good work!
I liked the almost D&B feel of the drums. The could of been a little more heavy and deep, but its still pretty damn trippy.