this is my third song, and i made several mistakes, ie, the piano is a little too staccato. this is because i didnt have access to a pedal, because i forgot it at home... =(
the more obvious mistake is the cello at the end. basically, sequencing in logic pro leads to the first note missing, so that is why it sounds like that. furthermore, the melody by the cello is wrong, which is why it sounds bad.
cello removed at the end, MORE instruments, cant notice any mistakes, but still open to criticism.